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Mr. Sunshine RU 486 by =adahplatha:iconadahplatha:





In my dream there are
marriages and a leaf and my third
grade teacher, how Freudian that she is
smoking a cigar.   And goldfish live in vodka -

a terrible accident!  Even with the
too-tight dog collar that you're holding tenderly with your
teeth, goldfish mr. sunshine would slip by and live in my stomach

and I would never be alone

but the tickle inside my ribs would make me open
my mouth wide for a big    belly     laugh
and out would come mr. sunshine, with the
cornbread & ninety proof & cigarette butts that
I swallowed like a spy

mr. sunshine's vestigial fins wave a calm goodbye
to my strange mouth, and when people ask
how old he would be, today
I tell them that I don't remember.  

Even if you're afraid of broken glass
I would call you away from playing family
and point to the fluttering creature on the floor,
shaking, it's solid oak base so you've got to help me
kill it.
©2005-2009 =adahplatha
:iconadahplatha:

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Mr. Sunshine (RU 486?)

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:icons0lidsn4k3:
Extremely strange.

But severely worth commentating on. I can't find a single thing in this piece that lessens it, but for some reason in humors me. And I can't place exactly what makes it funny to me, because the imagery is so...vague, yet vivid as well. Awesome job, as usual, my muse.

--
J'ai Aimé...

J'ai Souffert....

Maintenant, Je Hais.
:icondiamondie:
I almost let this slip away from my overcrowded message center, but fortunately my sanity returned. This is really good in its absurdity, I think it's even one of my favorite poems from you. I wouldn't really mind if it was even more strange. Despite the flow of wicked ideas the poem feels very coherent and I like the structure a lot.

Not capitalizing mr. sunshine seems slightly odd and same goes for "too-tight". Not many things to point out, the quality is solid throughout, though the fifth stanza feels perhaps weaker than the rest.
:iconketlin:
Ho boy, and I imagine you throwing up. @_<
:iconadahplatha:
BLEAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHGH.


that's the idear, I suppose.
:iconfeartinybubbles:
Did your third grade teacher sound like the peanuts teacher?

You know bowah wah wha wha and so on

I think she has a oral issue and the cartoonist knowing this saved our child eyes from her "puffing away on her on consuming cigar.

hmmmm

Best to kill it when it's sleeping.
sneak up with a salt shaker...... carefully
shake some salt on the tail

--
Man seeks to escape himself in myth, and does so by any means at his disposal. Drugs, alcohol, or lies. Unable to withdraw into himself, he disguises himself. Lies and inaccuracy give him a few moments of comfort.
:iconadahplatha:
I love your thought process. if it could be bottled you could sell it for more than a Dali painting.
:iconzombie-like:
I swallowed like a spy was unexpected, and made me laugh in the midst of this Incredible Mister Limpet visits LA (btw, I'm getting ready to move there!), and I liked this, but can remember others of yours I liked better. But it's like comparing steak with spaghetti...both are delicious, I'm just more of an Italian at heart. Did you see the Super Mario Brothers live action movie? I think it snapped my head. ANYway, you're still very sexy and I hope you get back to the ministry soon to tell us of your new status the the people's temporary, honorary, unwilling dA Pope-ette. :sushi:

Rub-adub-dub thanks for the grub yay God.

--
I hate bugs.

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